327898429 发表于 2023-2-9 23:38   全显示 1楼
我觉得，文章开头说两姐妹争过男人，这点的引入才有两姐妹的较量作为前因，父亲无意的发现，怎么一步步的参与进来。好像在一开始，逸飞去和医生的交流也起到解决心理问题，我认为结合父亲们的加入，让其突出医生这身份并且也参与进来，感觉会更好。慢慢的突破心理很重要，这事一下子就成，反而会失去感觉！谢谢作者还来这么优秀的作品，期待！
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